Since I started writing my blog, I have had a certain creativity wake up within me. It seems that simply writing has pushed my mind on to even more writing. I find that it is very enjoyable to do, and that I am at least somewhat capable of writing things that others would like to read.
I have always thought of writing a book, but I have never really gotten around to giving it a shot – usually, I just have a general idea of who the main character is going to be, and how the story will end, but everything else is missing. So when I got the idea for this story – the whole story – I simply knew that I had to follow through. This is not going to be a book, but it is certainly going to be quite long, if I manage to finish it. This is a test, to see if I can write something that other people will really sit down and read, and to see if I can actually survive the ordeal of writing a whole story.
This story, is set in World of Warcraft. I wanted to try and write a story about a raid, as it would be if we followed actual people in a real world, as we would when reading a book. What raid, which people, and what they will see, is a secret for now. What I share with you here is merely the introduction, the very beginning of the book. Once I have a few chapters, I will start posting it on official boards, and if it turns out that people actually enjoy reading this, we will see the finished product.
Please click below to read the beginning of the story, and please, do leave feedback. It will be greatly appreciated! Happy holidays!
Unnamed
The call came with the wind like a gentle sigh. Qieth Brambleheart looked up from the branches of the the gnarleyroot bush he had been searching and held his breath, listening. As the call was heard by sentries across the lands, they sprung to action and added to the bellow. The deep hum of the horns, started merely minutes earlier in the lush north, increased in volume and rolled across the plains. Qieth sighed. There was no mistaking that sound. Only twice in his life had had he heard the Horns, and he knew what they meant: War.
He crawled out from the overhang and stood exposed in the sun, listening as the sound passed him to continue its travels further south. Peeking into the tattered leather bag in his hands, he counted eight seeds, some of them barely ripe, and let out another sigh from deep within his guts. He had spent two days of hard travel to reach the canyons of Thousand Needles, hoping to return with large quantities of ingrediants for his remidies, but he could not stay. The call had sounded, and he had to answer.
The horns would bellow every hour for five days, he knew, crying out to the horde to return home, to answer the call. As he trekked through the dry, hot desert, seldom shielded by the towering pillars, he contemplated what this meant. He had fought before. When he had first heard the call, he had been but a calf, too young to even carry a mace, to short to use a staff. But he had seen the look of horror on his mothers face, and the solemn tear in his fathers eye as he said his goodbyes and went to war. The first war had been the Massing of the Gnolls, and his father had died a hero on the battlefield, they said, taking no less than thirtyeight of the beasts with him to the grave.
The second call came years later when news that the united forces of of humans, gnomes and dwarves was preparing to lay siege on Orgrimmar. Qieth, a caring druid by heart, had tended to the wounded during the four month war that had followed. It had been a grusome battle, fuelled by generations of hatred and prejustice, and when he had stood on the ramparts of Orgrimmar, his eyes had taken in the sight of his fallen friends on the field, unable to help them, unable to cope with reality of the events unfolding before his eyes. It had been a terrible loss for The Horde, but in the end they had depleted the resources of The Alliance.
He climbed a peak halfway up the canyon wall and studied the sun. Midday had passed. He sat down in the sliver of shade provided by the overhang above and began ruminating his breakfast, and as he let the cool wall work on his strained muscles, his mind drifted to the strange folk of the east. He had heard the stories of people of The Alliance; Evil folk, intent on slaugheting anyone blue or green, or with more hair that they deemed sanitary. He had been taught hostility towards these evil men, who had killed thousands of his brethren, and who would do so again, he was told, were they given the chance. But who was he to judge anothers character? Should the deer hate the hunter who wishes to feed his family, and should the plant fear the herbalist looking to cure an infected child? The Alliance and The Horde had been upholding the armistice written down years before, after all, which ensured a truce between their people as long as no foul deeds were done to the other faction. He had been living a peaceful life since the war, and had not had any contact with the alliance. Well, no contact with any, except for Bob.
Bob wasn’t his real name, ofcourse. No selfrespecting dwarven parents would name their heir something as simple as that. But Bobarnicus Nickelskin loathed his name, and his name was publicly shortened with every headbutt he had given and any barfight started over it. He had been fetching water when he first met Bob, a wiry looking little man, with light grey skin true to his name. They had been oblivious to the others existance, until they turned a rock and stood no more than a few feet apart. Bob was clad in heavy plate armor, a battle axe strapped to his back so huge that the shaft poked above his head and the blade barely clearing the ground. Scars covered his face and his wild hair and untamed beard poked out from his helmet. Bob was a warrior-adventurer-monsterkiller, by his own account, and had been traveling to a cave in Dustwallow Marsh said to hold not only great treasure but a giant dragon as well, and had taken a detour to refill his waterskin. In turns, their eyes went from the other to the water, and they slowly inched their way towards the bank. As they sat in silence, a good distance apart, the dwarf began to grunt and shuffle his feet.
“Aight, are we gunna do this or what? I’d reckon I’d like me axe in me hands ‘efore we start, if ye catch me drift. Can’t feel good ’bout a fight if the fights not fair, ye know?” said the dwarf, eyeing the tauren three times his size. Still, he didn’t rise to make a move. Qieth looked at the stubby little man with a passive demeanor. “If you wish to fight me, dwarf, then go ahead. But it will be a sorry fight, that, as my staff is no match for the likes of you.”. “Damn straight!”, grunted the dwarf and drained his skin. Since then they had met many times, swapping stories of their adventures well into the night, sharing drinks from harsh dwarven ale to tauren potatowine. Bob was well traveled, and always seemed to have a little too much energy than what was good for him, or anyone else around him, but as his eyes glaced over as he retold the story of the Ice Caverns for the 10th time, Qieth would settle himself and enjoy the evening with his friend. Qieth didn’t mind to hear the stories again. He figured that Bob was probably the closest any tauren had ever gotten to a dwarven friend, and took the experience in stride.
No, he decided as he continued his climb, not all of The Alliance are bad. Find a common ground, be it a waterhole or trading routes, and they could learn to live in peace. Some day, perhaps, their people could live, if not side by side, then at least in a tolerated society, but until then he would protect his tribe and those it joined. He had to do what he had to do, and if this was to be another great battle between The Alliance and The Horde, he would take his place amung his people. As he climbed over the last edge, many feet above the bottom of the canyon, his face was set with determination. War had called, and he was going to answer.





Can you include a TL;DR version? *hide*
Oh sure!
TL;DR: And they lived happily ever after…
Happily ever after? So the dwarf is some kind of your Prince Charming and the two of you marry?
But now to the more serious comment:
I like your writing style quite a lot. It doesn’t sound clumsy, but also not overcomplicated or oldfashioned(I hope you know what I mean – I’m terrible at explaining things so people understand).
If you made it a really long story (or a book), I could translate it in German…just in case you need someone for that
I could also be your lector (that is, your proof-reader).
I could also clean your house and cook you dinner. Roast chicken maybe? *runs away*
A little piece of advice from me:
If you were to make this one a rather long story, I’d like to see a small chapter – like a prologue – starting really dramatic where you hint at the danger Qieth will be fighting. I always prefered stories that begin with an adrenalin rush to ones that begin with recapping the up-to-now story of the main character. I also think it makes the audience more curious as to how the story progresses.
But that’s (probably) just me.
The disadvantage would be that the first “chapter” would be without Qieth (or at least without mentioning his character) and if you released it like your blog, you would run the danger of slienating your audience because of the non-existent transition from “Part 1″ to “Part 2″.
I hope you understand what I mean. Sometimes I don’t understand myself…but…oh, who cares…
Anyway: great way of writing and up till now a quite smooth storytelling. I know it’s a bit early to say something like this, but I’m confident.
Keep up the good work.
edit: line 21 “slienating” should be “alienating”. Just for clarity
Thank you very much for the comments, Bartol
I have been wondering about the start as well. It would lose a lot of the story and the character backgrounds and so on, if i simply had them start at… where ever they are going, but at the same time, it would take “a bit” before they actually got there, and until then, theres nothing much to catch the reader (other than “Oh, the Horns of War – interesting!”)
It is the same with the title. I could just go ahead and call it “The Attack On..” or something blatant as that, but that seems like a silly idea. But if I call it something else, people will generally not know what the story is about, and I cant add an introduction saying “This is a story about a raid” before anybody reads it
So yeah, it is probably the best idea to do a prologue, and let people know that something is happening. I think i know how i can make that happen
Great little backstory! Gives a lot of insight into both Qieth’s personality and his reasons for fighting. Personally, I’m tired of the stories where the parents die in battle or to some grave injustice, and that becomes the driving force behind the main character. While you touched upon the death of Qieth’s father, you didn’t overdo it, preferring instead that Qieth fights for honor and the defense of his friends and homeland — quite the refreshing change!
If you do decide to continue this story, I’d recommend inventing villains and missions of your own. In other words, I wouldn’t stick to the typical “kill the Lich King” story that drives Qieth in-game. Anyone can take the in-game lore and pre-established storyline and fit their character into it (no offense to anyone who’s done this), but it’s far more inventive to create your own scenarios.
But yeah, great stuff here!
I think it would move too far if I, for the very first
story, made up something entirely on my own. I’d like to stick to this idea (and this raid already in game), but I will alter the place to fit my story. I think it can be pretty cool.
Did you catch at all that he was a healer, although a bad one, or did that
not register much through the story?
I did catch that he was a healer (and an herbalist/alchemist it would seem), which left me a wee bit curious.
Personally, you being a tauren druid, I would probably choose a lesser-known aspect of lore to start, like maybe healing the Barrens and the Wailing Caverns. If you’re going to go for Qieth’s time in Icecrown, you’ve got a lot of in-between to fill.
Or you might be really adventurous with your writing (not right away, but eventually), and author something about the events surrounding Cataclysm. It’s something that will clearly affect everyone throughout the world, but how was Qieth affected?
I just wanted to make sure that the reader was aware that this guys is a healer, but not a very good one. Character development, ya know?
The idea (VISION!) i had, was to write a raid as if it was a real story, so i am going to stick with that. There might be something different later. And i can assure you, that i will not be writing about Icecrown Citadel. The story is going to take place in.. nah, i wont spoil it
I guess ill just have to get to writing it. If it turns out to be a hit, i would definately consider doing something Cataclysm-ish
I definitely look forward to it! If this start is any indication, I’m really going to enjoy reading it!
A book that I would love to read! From what I’ve read so far, it looks like it could become very interesting, and as said above; It’s not about some enraged sicko that’s going on a rampage; slaughtering whatever he find on his way towards “justice”. I like that fact that Qieth’s a healer here. Make another difference aswell, and I think it’s possible to make a good story from the aspect of a healer, and of course, a druid.
I’m really looking forward to more of the story, and I’ll keep reading your blog. Good job!
– Zareth
Thank you very much for the feedback anyways
I should be getting to writing a bit more, but today has been spent nursing a very attentive hangover
Pretty good post. I just stumbled upon your blog and wanted to say that I have really enjoyed reading your blog posts. Any way I’ll be subscribing to your feed and I hope you post again soon.
Thanks a lot, Denny!